Escape of the rats

We are writing the scene talked about in our class book. The rats tell about when they were living in a village and went to the Sunday market to eat the leftovers. The men from the laboratory come and capture some. This is that part written. Can you build up pictures in your head from our writing. can you imagine the scene?

I was hyperventilating in the cage while the man was taking us on a big shelf. We are in the cage waiting just trying to escape from this this place and stay calm. We don’t know what will happen to us.”

“We will try to make a plan for all of us just take deep breaths. I’ll make the plan and you got to stay calm ok. I’ll break the cages door and let the other go into air ducts and I and you will do the same with the others we must do it really silent and do it slowly we go fast if they come for us,” said Jenner

“Are you ready to do the plan?” asked Justin “Yes I am” 3 ‘2 ‘1 GO! You stay here Jenner and I will say you name when it’s safe. Do you” understand?”

“I do and how long will it take for you?”

“Well we only have 6 hours before morning  and it will take about 20 minutes.  But  we’ve got to do it really !”