Water Slide - Hunter

We have been practising writing so our reader gets a picture in their head, also we want the reader to know our feelings. Can you write in the comment box if this writing gives you a picture or lets you know feelings.
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ZOOM - I went screaming down the slide on my back. I kept my body stiff together so I got lots of speed. It's more fun going fast. I went 'splashing into the muddy water. I felt muddy water. I felt awesome. I had muddy water in my hair.