We have been practising writing so our reader gets a picture in their head, also we want the reader to know our feelings. Can you write in the comment box if this writing gives you a picture or lets you know feelings.
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I stood back and I pulled the string back. I was looking at the target. I let go of the string and it hit the target like a missile hitting a house.
Shikain, your story brought back memories of my first try at archery. Did the string scrape your arm when you let it go? The simile you have used of a missile hitting a house tells me that you used all your strength to pull the string back. I like your perfectly punctuated short sharp sentences. They help the image of you with the bow and arrow shoot into my mind like an arrow into a target!
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Wow that little piece of writing is very POWERFUL!!!
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