Thursday, May 30, 2013

Puke Ariki Descriptive Writing

Mindless

When I first walked into Puke Ariki, I heard a busy hum and smelt the mouth watering food in the Cafe, but when I stepped into the undeniably warm room that held priceless Maori artifacts in cold glass display cases. I was surprised with the strange, lingering silence. Soon after I was captured by the feeling that I had stepped back into the past. Even the touch of the hard stone anchor was not enough to wake me from my timeless trance. So I walked, calm and unnoticed, enjoying the feeling of the soft carpet beneath my feet. My soft breathing a constant lullaby. I was forever trapped in this peaceful world, lost, mindless.


By Zoe QK
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21 comments:

  1. ZoeMay 30, 2013 at 2:36 PM

    Sorry if there are any mistakes. Please tell me what you think.

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  2. abMay 30, 2013 at 2:40 PM

    awesome i love .......

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  3. AbbyMay 30, 2013 at 2:42 PM

    im mindless

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  4. IslandMay 30, 2013 at 2:43 PM

    I love monkeys (and your story!!)

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  5. ZoeMay 30, 2013 at 2:44 PM

    i love sloths and my story

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  6. Janelle!!!!!May 30, 2013 at 2:45 PM

    your story is Awesome!!!!!!!!

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  7. ZoeMay 30, 2013 at 2:45 PM

    sorry that was abby


























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  8. Janelle!!May 30, 2013 at 2:47 PM

    your Welcome!!!

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  9. AnonymousMay 30, 2013 at 3:44 PM

    Zoe, what a fabulous piece of writing. You certainly did use some powerful phrases and words just like the learning intended. One of the best pieces of writing I've seen you do yet. You have a future in writing!! Well done.

    Proud Miss K ;-)

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    1. ZoeMay 31, 2013 at 3:39 PM

      I hope my next story is even better!

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  10. Mrs McAllisterMay 30, 2013 at 4:19 PM

    I love your choice of words Zoe. I can really feel the contrast between first entering Puke Ariki and then moving on.

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  11. EvetteMay 31, 2013 at 9:49 AM

    Zoe that was an awesome story!! It was really descriptive!! I wanted to read it over and over again!!

    I love your story as much as I love horses!!

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  12. AnonymousMay 31, 2013 at 10:02 AM

    Zoe, that capture's the feeling of Puke Ariki beautifully, keep writing missy - you've got talent!!!

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  13. Billie wMay 31, 2013 at 4:39 PM

    Wow! That's really good!!!!!!!! you are the worlds best writer!!!!!!

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  14. Billie kMay 31, 2013 at 5:33 PM

    Cool Zoe Qk a.k.a ninja

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  15. Meg - In Dubai :)June 1, 2013 at 3:16 AM

    Wow, I think you are a better writer then me and I'm almost in Year 8! That is fantastic, great use of language. Keep it up!

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  16. billie wJune 1, 2013 at 8:47 AM

    I like the title I forgot to say!

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